Ohhh, this is the kind of feedback I crave. Thank you so much.
(Sorry they had to have a few drinks first, but that gives it a pleasant blurry buzziness. *g* And it seems clear that they'd have gotten there anyway.)
Jack's reaction seems nicely realistic to me, including the sense I get that he's letting himself be persuaded to keep it off the record.
Yes, totally. I think so too. I think Jack totally doesn't get it, but they are his teammates and can do no wrong. And he's looking for a way to be able to justify it to himself to let them continue.
It also seems realistic that he doesn't join in, even tho that's very sad,
I was very sad that I didn't get to make this OT4 for Meg. Actually, when I got the assignment gave myself the assignment, my only problem was trying to figure out why Jack didn't join in. It was a fun challenge to find reasons/emotions/a scenario that the other three can share and Jack doesn't. Going the spiritual/metaphysical route helped with that.
and I really, really like the 'alliance between our chosen allies' angle and how that gives Jack(/Asgard) another way in and he still says no.
I love their various chosen allies SO MUCH and have probably a huge essay on that, how each of them has a species/race their plotlines are most associated with and how that plays into their personality and gah! I couldn't help but put it in the OT3.
Love the fierce anger and near-violence of the Teal'c/Daniel kiss.
Yes. Especially so soon after FiaD, this relationship was the hardest to write and needed to be more fraught than the other two.
And the way the multiple-pov structure and the physical joining at the end amplify the conceit of joining/blending and blended/discrete identities. It all gives a very woven feeling, a kind of tapestry.
Eee, thanks so much! (I'm having a ball looking at all the fics that have come out of this 'thon and how they handle that blending, especially which points of view get employed. I love writing OT3/threesomes because of the way the blending works.
So I'm really glad that it came out well, all the different angles... *squeeee*
Thanks ever so much for reading and giving such detailed feedback. :)
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(Sorry they had to have a few drinks first, but that gives it a pleasant blurry buzziness. *g* And it seems clear that they'd have gotten there anyway.)
Ack, you know, I didn't even realize that. I wanted them off-base and was hitting the end of the fic homestretch, all I need is one good sex scene and I'll be golden, and it didn't even occur to me that I'd gotten them drunk for first-time sex, which is a cliché I could do without. But I did enjoy writing tipsy!Sam in the final scene.
Jack's reaction seems nicely realistic to me, including the sense I get that he's letting himself be persuaded to keep it off the record.
Yes, totally. I think so too. I think Jack totally doesn't get it, but they are his teammates and can do no wrong. And he's looking for a way to be able to justify it to himself to let them continue.
It also seems realistic that he doesn't join in, even tho that's very sad,
I was very sad that I didn't get to make this OT4 for Meg. Actually, when I
got the assignmentgave myself the assignment, my only problem was trying to figure out why Jack didn't join in. It was a fun challenge to find reasons/emotions/a scenario that the other three can share and Jack doesn't. Going the spiritual/metaphysical route helped with that.and I really, really like the 'alliance between our chosen allies' angle and how that gives Jack(/Asgard) another way in and he still says no.
I love their various chosen allies SO MUCH and have probably a huge essay on that, how each of them has a species/race their plotlines are most associated with and how that plays into their personality and gah! I couldn't help but put it in the OT3.
Love the fierce anger and near-violence of the Teal'c/Daniel kiss.
Yes. Especially so soon after FiaD, this relationship was the hardest to write and needed to be more fraught than the other two.
And the way the multiple-pov structure and the physical joining at the end amplify the conceit of joining/blending and blended/discrete identities. It all gives a very woven feeling, a kind of tapestry.
Eee, thanks so much! (I'm having a ball looking at all the fics that have come out of this 'thon and how they handle that blending, especially which points of view get employed. I love writing OT3/threesomes because of the way the blending works.
So I'm really glad that it came out well, all the different angles... *squeeee*
Thanks ever so much for reading and giving such detailed feedback. :)
-Ari